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My Writing Process for this Semester:
The writing process this semester was really fun. I liked the writing sneezes that we used to have. I also like the scene test that we did for our characters. I learned that some stories are better to write in first person, while other stories are better to write in third person. I liked how we used to describe our characters by listing out things that the character liked and disliked. I learned that it is important to work on your characters before you start writing the story so then you know all about the character. I also learned that it is important to take out details from your story that are like distracting details, scenes that don’t give important information, or could be easily summarized, descriptions that don’t give important information, and summaries that give background information that the reader doesn’t need. I learned to keep Actions, thoughts, and dialogue that move the story and develop the character, descriptions and moments that highlight the theme(s), images and metaphors that pop out meaning, scenes that are significant, summaries that explain important information. I learned to have a good lead that catches the readers interest. I learned techniques to make the story more interesting like making it challenging for the character to act, creating a time crunch, raising the character’s motivation, or adding danger. I feel very good about my story because it is finished and it turned out to be a great story. I really like the product of my story.
Now I will give you the synopsis and excerpt and my realistic fiction short story—-
Title: Friendship Disaster
Synopsis:
Katherine just wishes for a friend. Just a friend that she could hangout with. But even she after she finds a best friend, she has many more problems to face. After Violet founds out how Katherine became friends with her, she get mad. Now everyone hates her. Every single student in fifth grade hates her. Even the counselor is mad at her.
Excerpt:
The next day……
During class Ms. Parker, our counselor came and asked Violet, Cadence, and I to come out of the classroom. She said she wanted to have a talk with us. I knew I was in big trouble. The three of us walked out of the classroom and followed Ms. Parker to her office. No one said a word on the way. The hallway was empty and quiet. The only thing that i could hear was children pointing at us and whispering to their friends, from the classroom window.
When we reached Ms. Parker’s office she told us to sit down on the chairs that surrounded her messy brown table. She told me to sit in the middle. I sat down and stared at the floor. No one said a single word. Ms. Parker took a deep breath. Then she started talking.
My Story:
FRIENDSHIP DISASTER
As I got out of the building the hot sun shined down me. Sweat was rolling down my head as I carried my book and my lunchbox, heading for the lunch room. I was thinking how amazing it would be if I had a friend. I was imagining the two of us walking together to recess. Playing games together, sharing our secrets, talking about things we hate and the things we like, sharing food at lunch time, having parties all the time, having play dates, talking about mean girls at school, talking about family problems, talking about our vacations, sharing ideas with each other in class, talking in class, hanging out everyday at recess together and so much more. But for now, another lonely recess had passed, just like all the others.
I walked in the the stinky, noisy, smelly lunchroom still carrying my book and lunchbox. The lunchroom smelled like rotten bananas, and the tables were all dirty with food on them because the little kids ate before us. This room was the room I hated most in the whole school, but sadly I had to come everyday or the teacher would give me detention if she caught me out of the lunchroom at lunch time. I have never got detention and I am pretty sure I never will because I am really good when it comes to following the rules. I really don’t know why people hate me so much. I used to have friends when I first came to this school, but now two months have passed, and everyone has a friend. Everyone except me.
“Sit down everyone” the teacher screamed.
I sat at the corner of the table. I opened a lunch box put my book beside my lunchbox and took out my cheese sandwich.
“Hi Katherine”, Kate said as she started to open her lunchbox.
“Why are you sitting next to me. Go sit next to Eve or somewhere else. Just, don’t sit next to me. P-LEASE.You know I don’t like it when YOU sit next to me, so go somewhere else.” I said in a annoyed voice. Then I smirked at her
Kate got up and walked to the other corner of the table, almost crying. She was a new girl and she never really did not do anything mean to me, but I just didn’t like her. I didn’t care if she was crying. I didn’t know why people were so kind to Kate and not me. I never did anything mean to anyone but no one likes me. Who would want to be kind to Kate? Who would want to be friends with Kate? I thought.
I lived in New York with my mom and my dad. I am an only child. My family was rich and my parents give me anything I want as long as I got good grades. All I used to do all day was study or waste time on the television. I went to a school called Hojin International School. I am in grade five. This was my first year in this school and I wasn’t liking it.
I ate my cheese sandwich in the first five minutes of lunch. The rest of the fifteen minutes I read my book. When it was time to line up I was the first one in line because my homeroom teacher Mrs. Green, made me line leader.
When we reached the classroom Mrs. Green told us that we had assigned seats. I was very disappointed because I liked my seat because I didn’t want to sit in a group. I was actually pleased when I found out who I was sitting with. I was sitting with Violet, the most popular girl in my grade. Everyone loved Violet. I made sure when I was talking to her I was always kind and never even a little mean. I always wanted to be friends with Violet and now she was sitting next to me for 6 months. The better part was that Cadence, Violet’s best friend was not on the same table so now Violet won’t be able to talk to Cadence. I didn’t like Candace a lot either. I hated her as much as I hated every girl in this classroom except for Violet. Bella and Lauryn were also on my table but I didn’t really care because I was so happy that Violet was on in my table group.
“Hi Katherine” Violet said as she moved her desk next to mine and waved to Cadence who waved back
“Hi Violet, I am so excited we are in a table group.’ I said smiling.
Violet smiled back.
“Hi Katherine” said Bella as she moved her desk in front of mine
“Hi Katherine” said Lauryn who shoved her desk next to Bella
Bella and Lauryn were best friends but I don’t think they were so happy to see me in their table group. I didn’t reply both of them but I just smiled back which surprised them. I don’t understand why me smiling at them surprised them, but I didn’t care. I was just so excited Violet was on my table group.
“Okay Class, settle down. Today we are going to read each other’s realistic story and then comment and give suggestions. The person sitting next to you will be your partner for the story revising.” Mrs. Green said
I read Violet’s story while she read mine. Then I wrote some suggestions and comment on a lined piece of paper. We took the whole class period just reading and talking about our story. Then I gave her her story, as she handed me back my story and the lined piece of paper with the comments and suggestions on it.
“Class, English has ended. Please put away your books and take out your math textbook and workbook. Also please stay where you are right now because I have made assigned seats for math also. From now on you all will be having assigned seats for all the subjects you have with me. ”
Since I was in elementary school, I didn’t have too move to different classrooms for different subjects. I also didn’t have different teachers for different subjects. Mrs. Green was my English, Math, Science, and Social Studies teacher. My P.E teacher was Ms. Thomas. My. French Teacher was Ms. Alice. My art teacher was Mrs. Stewart, and my IT teacher was Ms. Edwards.
Mrs. Green opened the seating chart on the smart board. I was on the back table with Eve in front of me. Cadence next to me, and Kate next to Eve. I was the last one to come on the table because I was gone to the bathroom. I was pretty disappointed that I had to sit with Cadence and Kate. Eve wasn’t that bad even though I didn’t really like her, but CADENCE AND KATE!!! I hated both of them. I sighed as I glanced at my table group.
“Class, please do page 135-138” and then questions 7-15 from page 139.”
I finished my work and then it was time to go home.
“Class, there is no homework today.”
At home I brainstormed ideas of how I can be best friends with Violet. I found out that I would go on Cadence’s account and tell Violet that she didn’t want to be friends with her anymore. Then I would be kind to Violet and become her best friend.
The next day……
In IT i asked Violet when was Cadence’s birthday. When she asked me why I wanted to know I just said that I wanted to give her a surprise present. So Violet told me that Cadence’s birthday was August 28. The rest of the period was boring. We were learning how to design stuff so we could print it on the 3D printer.
After that we had snack so I asked Violet if could hangout with her and so she said yes. I don’t think cadence was happy I was hanging out with them but she didn’t say anything. The break ended quickly and then we had Science. After science we had art. Then we had lunch.
“Hi Violet” I said smiling
“Hi Cadence”
“Hi” they both said as we headed to the soccer field
The three of us played tag for the 20 minutes. I was so happy that I finally had a friend. I didn’t want Cadence to be friends with Violet because all they did in the lunchroom was talk while I was left alone eating my lunch and reading my book.
I had a french test but it wasn’t that hard. After that I had social studies. In social studies Mrs. Green said she didn’t have the assigned seats ready and she will have them ready next class. After class I saw Kate handing out pink envelopes to every girl in the class. She gave it to everyone so when I looked at her she just turned her face away from me. I was so mad at her I wanted to scream at her but I just let it go.
When I went home went to gmail and wrote this:
username: cadence_albert@ihjs.edu.sa
password: 20050828
I logged into Cadence’s account and went directly to hangouts. I opened the chat with Violet and Cadence and then I wrote:
“Can you PLEASE not hangout with me anymore at lunch or recess. I don’t like you. Actually I hate you. Never ever talk to me again. I don’t know why anyone who even WANT to be your friend. Never ever come close to me you mean fat ugly girl.” and then I pressed logout. I was so pleased with myself, I couldn’t stop smiling and thinking that soon me and Violet will be BFFs.
The next day……..
We had English first and we worked on our realistic fiction story. Then it was snack time.
“Hey Violet”
“What do you want. I thought you said I should never talk to you again. Go check Hangouts.” Violet said as she walked away
I followed her trying to to laugh.
“So Violet, what happened?” I asked
“Well, I checked my hangouts and Cadence had written all this mean stuff about me like no one wants to be your friend, and never talk to me again.”
“That not true, I want to be your friend.” I said innocently
“Really!”
“Yes”
“Thanks for helping me feel better Katherine. We are now friends. You can hangout with me whenever you want.” Violet said with a smile “And how about you come to my house after school?”
“Really!! I am there!” I said happily
I was so happy we were friends. And better, I will be going to her house after school just to hangout.
Then we had P.E and science. After those blocks we had lunch. This was the first time I was looking forward to lunch. Violet and I talked at recess and in the lunchroom. We walked together to the soccer field, and then to the lunchroom, and then together back to art class since we had art next. I didn’t see Cadence anywhere during recess and lunch,, and now she was late for art, but I didn’t care. I was having so much fun with Violet. I never really had a friend. Violet came 2 minutes late gave Mrs. Stewart a note. After art we had math and then it was time to go home. I went to Violet’s house and we played many games. I had to go home for dinner at 6:00.
The next day……
During class Ms. Parker, our counselor came and asked Violet, Cadence, and I to come out of the classroom. She said she wanted to have a talk with us. I knew I was in big trouble. The three of us walked out of the classroom and followed Ms. Parker to her office. No one said a word on the way. The hallway was empty and quiet. The only thing that i could hear was children pointing at us and whispering to their friends, from the classroom window.
When we reached Ms. Parker’s office she told us to sit down on the chairs that surrounded her messy brown table. She told me to sit in the middle. I sat down and stared at the floor. No one said a single word. Ms. Parker took a deep breath. Then she started talking. When she was done talking she looked at me.
“Katherine, now what should you saw to Cadence and Violet for breaking their friendship?” Ms. Parker said seriously
I was quiet for some time, looking at the ground,ashamed and embarrassed of myself. I glanced at Ms. Parker but she wasn’t pleased either. Finally I took a deep breath and spoke up
“I am so sorry Cadence. I promise I will never do this again. And I am sorry Violet for cyber bullying you and making you think it was Cadence. I promise I didn’t mean any of that stuff that I wrote. I promise.” I said ashamed of myself
“Then why did you write all that, and why did you made me think that it was Cadence who did all this.”
“Well I just wanted to have a friend so then wouldn’t be bored every lunch and recess. I wanted to be your friend because everyone hates me. And I made you think that Cadence cyber bullied you so then you will only be friends with me.”
“Well, the three of us could have been friends if you just wouldn’t have bullied me.” Violet said still mad at me
“I am really sorry and I understand if you never want to be my friend again.” I said almost in tears.
I realized how bad I had been. I realized why everyone hated me. They hated me because I was always mean and annoying to them. I realized I hated my classmates and that’s when they started hating me. I kept my head down. No one said a word. Then Violet broke the silence.
“Katherine, you can be my best friend if you promise to apologize to everyone you were mean.” Violet said smiling
“Really! I asked as looked at Cadence who was smiling. “Will it be okay if I am your friend?” I asked cadence
“You already are” she said as she hugged me. “And I forgive you” she said smiling
“Well, I think you girls should be going back to class. Don’t you think?” Ms. Parker said
When it was time go home I asked Candace and Violet to come over to my house and hangout.
“I am coming” Cadence said excited
“Me too.” Violet said happily
“Yay. I just got the best idea ever. I know you will love it. But let’s go the the bus before they blow the whistle. I will tell you about the plan in my bus.” I said
I had promised Violet I would apologize everyone and now she and Cadence came to help me make the surprise. I started baking cupcakes. Violet and Cadence helped me bake and put frosting on the cupcakes. When the cupcakes were frosted I wrote sorry on all of them and put two cupcakes away. After that we decorated the cupcakes together. Then I made apology cards for: Kate, Bella, Lauryn, and Eve. After that it was time for Cadence and Violet to go home.
The next day at lunch……
At lunch we all didn’t go to the lunchroom but convinced Mrs.Green if we could stay in the classroom. When she asked why I told her my plan. Violet and Cadence and made sure Kate, Bella, Lauryn, and Eve didn’t go to the lunchroom. I apologized to each of them and then gave them a cupcake with sorry on it. Then I gave the each a card. It said that I was sorry for everything I did. When they all forgave me I handed a cupcake to Violet and Cadence. That cupcake was bigger than the others and it said Thank You on it. They thanked me and hugged me. Then I gave them each a Thank you card which took me 2 hours to make. After lunch I had a lot of friends. Now my friends were Kate, Bella, Lauryn, and Eve. Also my best friends were of course Violet and Cadence.
When it was time to go home Kate came up to me and handed me a pink envelope.
“Hi Katherine. Will you come to my birthday party. Its today.” She said smiling
“Of Course, I will be there. Also happy birthday” I said excitedly
I was so excited I was going to Kate’s party. As soon as I got home I got dressed in my best clothes. I put my favorite expensive jewelry. Then I put five hundred dollars in my purse and waited outside for Violet to come. She said she was going to be picking me and Cadence up so we can all go and buy the gift together. We we reached to the mall I went to the mall and bought her a amazing leopard blouse with a black skirt. Violet got her some expensive jewelry which matched my blouse and skirt, and Cadence got her matching shoes.Altogether it was four hundred dollars. We packed it nicely in a pink and shiny wrapping paper. We made sure it was pink since pink was Kate’s favorite color. After that I then put a fancy card saying: Hope you like your birthday gift. Love you, Katherine, Violet, and Cadence. ❤ I also attached a special birthday saying that I was sorry for being really mean to her and I will never ever do it again. I also wrote some kind things to her and wrote Happy Birthday. After that I signed my name at the bottom.
We all had an amazing time at Kate’s party. Kate specially thanked us for her gift. She came to me and thanked me for the birthday card. I told her that this was the best birthday party I have ever been to, and we soon became close friends.
From then on I was never mean to anyone again. I joined cheer leading group with Violet and was very popular and was loved by everyone in the school. From then on Violet, Cadence used to do everything together. We used to walk together to recess. We used to play games together, share our secrets, talk about things we hate and the things we like, share food at lunch time, have parties all the time, have play dates, talk about mean girls at school, talk about family problems, talk about our vacations, share ideas with each other in class, talk in class, hangout everyday at recess together and so much more. I was now the happiest girl in Hojin International School. And of course it couldn’t had happened with the help of my amazing best friends:
Violet and Cadence.
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this is a picture of Katherine when she was being mean.
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